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the table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. 23. 45

the table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. 23. 45
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This
 table graph illustrated information about consumer expenditures in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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 in three several categories in the year 2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that food/drinks/tobacco experienced a higher rate,
while
 leisure/education was the least popular. In terms of food, drink and tobacco, Turkey spent the most at 32.14%. The expenditure of Ireland was
also
 high (28.91%) in comparison with Sweden (15.77%).
Furthermore
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 the numbers of Italy and Spain were relatively the same, with 16,36% and 18,80%.
On the other hand
, the lowest expenditures were on leisure and education, which accounted for under 5% in all the countries. Turkey spend the most
on
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in
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this
 category (4,35%), which was double the amount of Spain. Clothing and footwear
was
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were
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 the
third
 category of consumer goods. The outlays for those items were between 9% in Italy and 5,40% in Sweden. The remaining countries averaged around 6,5% in the national
spendings
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spending
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