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Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that whether
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 is done by innate characteristics or because of poverty
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 a source of conservatory has not been settled yet.
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, some masses think that social issue or poverty the reason to turn into a career of
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, while other individuals believe that innate character is a result of
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. From my prospective, detrimental issue and insufficiency are the prime cause of
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, as person's nature is
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 access to
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 at some extent. In
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 essay, I would discuss about both the views. On the one hand, person's nature determines that they would become criminal. Whereas, plenty of individual which they are bullied in their schools, to the weaker boys or girls that turn into a criminal in the future.
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, bad characteristics
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 as laziness or selfishness could
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 breed future offenders, who seek to acquire easy
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 without doing hard work, Since to it they break the laws. On the flip side, it seems that the social issues and poverty are the main concern behind the
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.
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, owing to the unemployment people fail to earn
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 by which they cannot take up their expenditure which increase the
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 rate.
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, people who don't have a
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 they resorting to
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 for make end meet, and they will be tempted to pursue illegal activities just to support themselves and their family. In conclusion, those facts which discussed above, I would
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 argue that
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 the main reason to break the law is people don't have enough
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 for their basic needs;
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, there are some that people who have criminal nature,
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 government must take some appropriate action regarding that.
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