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Today's children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#children #pressure #society
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Majority
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The majority
 of the professionals like
doctor
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the doctor
 and teachers from poor countries prefer to
move
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 to developed nations. They expect a sophisticated life after pursuing higher educations. These people study in their own
country
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 and
move
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 to developed countries for working.
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 number is growing rapidly day by day. Let us discuss about the causes for them to
move
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 to other countries
further
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. As far as my knowledge, Professionals belonging to poor nations, who has
grew
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grown
 up in bad economic conditions like low
quality
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education
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,
unhygienic
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 facilities in their
country
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, anticipate to live
better life
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a better life
 in
future
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the future
. They might not have found ample opportunities after their
education
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 and opportunities they deserve for their
education
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. These professionals after their
education
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 wish to live
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quality
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the quality
 of life and provide the same
to
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for
 their family.
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 made them believe that they can provide better
education
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, facilities and health to their children and encouraged them to
move
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 to developed companies to work.
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 of
this
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,
Country
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 which has provided
education
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 to these professionals could not add up anything to their GDP as they
move
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 to other nations and work there.
This
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 will make poor
country
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 poorer. To avoid
this
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,
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,
 these countries should address
this
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 issue at
root cause level
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the root cause level
a root cause level
. The root cause
for
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of
 these people moving abroad is due to lack of
quality
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education
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 facilities and opportunities. They should be provided with
handsome
involving active participation
hands-on
 opportunities
at
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in
 their home
country
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 and their children should be provided with
quality
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education
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 by setting up some institutes. If poor countries are able to implement these measures, professionals like doctors and
teachers they
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teachers, they
don’t don’t prefer
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do not prefer
don’t prefer
 to
move
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 abroad, when they are getting all the benefits at their home
country
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.
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