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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter: • say which points in the article you agree with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres • offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing with reference to a recent article published in your newspaper which explains all town centres in our country are alike. To commence with, I agree, that it is a valid view if we consider Islamabad only as it is a developed city.
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, all the town centres have distinct attributes.
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, within a walled city, historic buildings can be predominantly seen which shows the Mughal Empire architectural work. The streets here are narrow, but always congested with people.
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 parking amenities are not available, people park their vehicles in surrounding areas. There is a huge variety of clothing and people all around the country visit
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 place to buy products at wholesale rates.
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, I would like to provide you with a tour with some of my family members so you can have better knowledge of markets which will help you to portray a factual image. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest. Yours faithfully, Haris Khan

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task achievement
In your letter, you've made an effort to address all parts of the task, but with more detail, each point could be made stronger. For instance, citing more specific examples or offering more in-depth explanations of how your town's center is unique would strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your letter follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs could be smoother to enhance flow. Consider using transitional phrases to better link ideas and paragraphs together, creating a more cohesive narrative.
task achievement
The overall tone of your letter is suitable and respectful, fitting the format of a letter to an editor. Maintaining this tone consistently helps to establish credibility and engage the reader effectively.
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