Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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It is undeniable that the vast majority of
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
generate more
money
than officials who work in the political sectors.
This
essay will discuss why
this
happens and how will it have a positive impact on people around the globe.
To begin
with, due to the technological development recently, it is often argued that
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
can be benefited more than those who work in politics,
such
as the government. The reason behind
this
is that they can earn more
money
depending on the number of their followers and how
lengthy
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long
lengths
are the advertisements they operate.
For instance
, during my MBA marketing course in the United States, I found that the number of followers may vary from one
influencer
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
to another and
thus
the more followers the more
money
.
In other words
, a make-up artist with 40,000 followers on Instagram can make almost 10,000.00 USD weekly, which considered a significant amount when compared to people who have a role in politics.
In contrast
, if
this
political
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politician
has an Instagram account, they will certainly make more
money
than their salaries.
Furthermore
, artists often have a significant role
on
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in
people’s life.
This
is because these artists may be knowledgeable at some point in a certain issue. To illustrate, Noor Al Huda, is an American
influencer
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
who is considered as a religious icon due to her plenty of knowledge in religions she has, and
thus
she inspires many people around the globe due to her millions of followers who watch her on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. For
this
reason,
such
actions have a vital role
on
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in
of
to
society and people. To conclude, it seems to be conspicuous that entertainers have a positive impact at some point on their followers without the neglecting the technological advancements.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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