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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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These days it has been discerned that few people are convinced that ultimately important or semi-important works will have performed by the perspicacious machines.
Subsequently
 the opinion that has risen for me has
also
 confronted only negative aspects of the assertion put forward. In
this
 essay we shall discuss about
this
 one-sided thought in its detailed mannerism.
Firstly
, the dream of artificial intelligence is straight for various developed countries, but is of colossal nature. It says that the travelling of
this
 project essentially depends upon various factors, which,
although
 aligns money, resources, power, research, information meticulously, yet with all these variables there are certain non-materialistic threads of acceptability, adaptability, culture, language, governmental rules and religion, which has often found to play an immense character on declaring the prosperous existence of something.
For example
 - Many villages in under-developed nations have not yet seen a constant supply of electricity or basic needs being satisfied, and
therefore
 the idea on auto mobilization is rather critical.
Moreover
, even if it will have accomplished still the impression cannot be perceived as the
last
 resort. It enunciates that the human has not cared to dwell permanently with anything
in particular
, but
instead
 followed a magnificent passage of envisaging, innovating, experimenting and cultivating aspirations to keep the newness of life.
For example
 – the utilization of the Internet has not only increased since 1990 but its controlled disposition has manifested, that people has aspired with notable ideas and far superior creativities solely on the basis of empirical knowledge and wisdom. So, on many occasions the determination of artificial intelligence has to withdraw its name as the radical attraction.
Lastly
, some people might be influenced with the regularity of outcomes acquired through the administration of sophisticated intelligence, yet in my opinion people will consecutively embed on to conceive that eventually all jobs will be rendered by automated bots.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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