Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?

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In
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modern era, children endure some ailments that they are known as adults’ aches
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as overweight.
Obesity
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costs
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cost
countries about 10% of
national medical budget
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the national medical budget
as
one
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in three adults and
one
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in six children are obese according to the global health organization report. In
USA
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the USA
,
obesity
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is epidemic and is a major cause of heart diseases, cancers and diabetes.
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essay will discuss the reasons of
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kind of
obesity
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and the proposed solutions. There are many causes of
this
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disease. At its simplest,
obesity
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results from people consuming more food than their body burns. But it is a more complex problem than that as children did not want to become
over weight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
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however their
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however, their
weight gain is a consequence of complicated changes in the environment where food is more readily available and opportunities for physical activation
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lacking. Another cause is the way young adolescents eat has changed over the
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50 years. American community children are eating more processed food and eating out a lot more frequently.
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to that, the foods offered in restaurants, snack shops and vending machines are higher in sugar, fat and calories than what we typically prepare in our own homes. Other factors are technology and the way we build our communities that influenced our lives. Both of these two factors have left us sedentary. Children in new communities must drive to school with their parents as it is often too far to walk. And many communities are built in a way that make it unsafe to be physically active as safe routes for walking and biking to school may not even exist. There is no simple or single solution to overcome children
obesity
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. It is going to take solutions at many levels to resolve
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problem. What can each
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of us as
children families
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children, families
to make our young girls and boys healthier?
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first we
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First, we
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can make our children eat more vegetables and fruits and fewer foods that are higher in fat and sugar. We can offer them to drink water
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of sugared drinks.
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to that,
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everyone, including
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including children and adults of all ages as well as ability levels need to get recommended amount of physical activity daily.
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, parents should restrict television viewing for their young children to less than two hours a day and should not put televisions in the bedroom of children. Young
children
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child
obesity
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is an alarming situation which should be controlled at its earliest. It is a mutual responsibility of both individual and government to identify the reasons of
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vulnerable disease and offer solutions to rectify it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Prevalent
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Comfort eating
  • Screen time
  • Physical education
  • Nutritional education
  • Economic disparities
  • Food deserts
  • Subsidize
  • Advertising
  • Weight management
  • Junk food
  • Healthy food options
  • Physical activity
  • Body image
  • Counseling
  • Consumer education
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