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The Spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the expansion of international companies coming with a rise of globalization brings people big opportunities. I completely agree with the said statement.
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 essay will discuss different perspectives and how the development provides everybody beneficial impacts, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The most immediate and helpful contribution brought from cross-national companies are job openings, in which most are high-level jobs needing high skilled and high-salary workers compared to local companies' ones. International companies usually carry with great financial support, enhanced technologies and well-designed management scheme that can benefit their works including l
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locally
hired employees. Not only can these job opportunities increase the employment rate of local nations, but
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 the average salary, technology development and management system improvement.
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, Alibaba currently has one of the most popular and advanced cloud-based e-commerce platform in China which is pioneered by the support of Yahoo! China, and some technical team members were
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 from Yahoo! China.
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, the products and services provided by global companies
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 give local r
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residents
a lot of convenient and cost-effect consumption. Inventing a successful innovation usually needs v
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vast amounts
a vast amount
of money and well-developed infrastructure which often is l
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lacking
in many countries.
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, people can enjoy global brand products like Coca Cola, M
cdonald's,
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mcdonalds
 iPhone and Google easily and cheaply even in undeveloped and developing countries. In conclusion, It's totally agreed that the development of cross-national businesses and its accompanying globalization could provide people more job opportunities and varieties of product and service options, which make our lives easier and better!

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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