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Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
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 capitalistic world, everything is monetized and
art
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 is no exception. Society, these days, is abuzz over a debate that the majority of artists are not adequately paid for their work.
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,
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government
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the government
 should intervene and pay them fairly so that their work could proceed unabated. I strongly believe that
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government
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the government
 should bail out the under paid artist due to the following reasons.
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The first
 and the foremost reason is my penchant for and personal inclination towards arts and artists. I am a great admirer and fond of
art
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 and
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 hold artists in high regards.
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, I strongly advocate that the artists struggling financially must be assisted by the
government
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.
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, there are some European countries where
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government
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the government
 has established dedicated agencies for the promotion of
artists
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the artists
 which is indeed a great initiative.
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, it is an established fact and a natural human phenomenon that our mental productivity is adversely affected by stress and worries.
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, it is imperative that artists facing financial woes must receive monetary support in order to relieve them of all the worries caused by the financial constraints. In
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 way, they would be able to flourish and
thrive which
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thrive, which
 will
consequently
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 enhance their imaginative and creative skill and they would continue to inspire and influence others with their work.
Furthermore
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, a strong
art
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 sector would be an economic asset and spur business activity and growth.
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, by supporting and appreciating
art
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 and artists, the
government
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 can enjoy a good return on investment in terms of tax revenues.
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, there are various western countries which have
unrivaled reputation
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an unrivalled reputation
unrivalled reputation
 for their
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sector which
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sector, which
 contributes significantly towards the economic growth of
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 countries.
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, on the basis of aforementioned reasons, it would be justified to say that
government
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 must lend a helping hand to struggling artists to promote and appreciate them, to foster creativity and to benefit from economic gains,
art
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 sector can offer.

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