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Some people prefer to work for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. What is your opinion?

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Of late, switching companies have become a trend among the working people. Even though there are individuals who likes to change jobs, there are some who would rather continue working for the same establishment. I believe one should change job to thrive in the competitive market and
also
 to grow financially.
First
 of all, to climb up the ladder of success an individual has to be updated daily with the changing technologies. Exposure to
new work environment
Suggestion
a new work environment
new work environments
 opens gateway to new opportunities. To cite an example, decades back computer engineers coded using C language, whereas the latest language used is Python, Javascript etc. If a person decides to stay in the same company doing the same work he does not gain experience with the latest platform.
Thus
, the chances of them being terminated from their work during a crisis would be high.
Secondly
, changing jobs means an upgrade to the salary.
For example
, a software engineer in India gets a minimum 40% hike in his new company with respect to his previous salary.
This
 encourages people to change
jobs whereas
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jobs, whereas
 others who sticks to the same company would be entitled to
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 just yearly appraisal. In conclusion, though few likes to stick to the same job, I believe changing jobs, occasionally, is better since it upgrades an individual's knowledge as well as increase their salary package.
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