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Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid jobs and the highest paid jobs should be reduced. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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There is a great deal of difference between the
amount
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 that the wealthiest and the poorest workers earn in many countries nowadays. The question of
weather
introduces two alternatives
whether
this
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 pay gap should be made smaller is
therefore
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 a frequent topic of discussion when people talk about the issue of equality in society.
Firstly
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, people
w are
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we are
ware
 highly skilled and talented in their professional workings should be rewarded with the highest
amount
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 of salary. Unless they get enough salary they deserve it will be more difficult to remain
at
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in
 the same job. High salaries are an incentive for the employees to
works
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work
 harder and attract to work under an unpleasant and dangerous situation.
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, the Japanese electrical power company paid a significant
amount
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 of salaries to the employees working under dangerous conditions of nuclear radiation which can cause serious health.
Moverover
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, there are many people who earn the lowest wages because they have a lack of professional skills and experience. There is no way to improve their salaries without they upgrade their
ability
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abilities
 in their works. Most of the low paid jobs could be harder and the most unpleasant jobs which are no one interested to do.
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, daily earn workers from a construction site usually earn a very low
amount
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 of
money
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money, although
although
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 they are working in a tough situation. In conclusion, the wages amounts of the employees should be considered based on their skills and experiences in their professionals. Paying high salaries can encourage all the
workers but
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workers, but
 there is no certain way to reduce gaps between the lowest and highest paid jobs.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • equitable
  • living standards
  • disadvantaged individuals
  • social unrest
  • crime rates
  • wage disparities
  • supply and demand
  • high-skilled workers
  • incentivize
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