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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computer should replace them. Howevee, others do not agree. Discuss both aides and give your opinion.

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Although
 It is considered that libraries are essential, to everyone in the society.
However
, whereas some people feel the existence of libraries are a total waste of funds and human efforts. I would support those that disagree that it is essential and can continue to exist for people to use. On the one hand, many people argue that computers can replace libraries since it can perform its functions.
This
 is because the central processing unit can operate effectively without human interactions and effort. To illustrate, for a library to function effectively there is a need to employ more people to oversee it, which sometimes consume much capitals. Another point to consider is that people do not have to be physically present to lend books since the internet will be integrated with it.
That is
 to say, many people can request for materials urgently needed at their comfort zones.
On the other hand
, I would agree with others that think libraries are useful and should continually exist. The reason is that many individuals, often visit the place to study owing to the fact that it is a safe and quiet place to study.
For instance
, a survey carried out by a group of researchers shows that ninety
per cent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of distractions are eradicated when studying in the library.
In other words
, if public
libraries stop
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libraries, stop
 operating
,
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,
 many persons might fail woefully after writing exams because they had no place to study adequately.
In addition
,
this
 reduces employment opportunities as many would be
relieve
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relieved
 of their jobs. As a consequence, poverty rate increases in the economy. In conclusion, while
people
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peoples'
peoples
 opinions vary
,
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,
I think that the benefits of a public library can’t be over-emphasize And it should not be interchanged with advanced technology.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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