IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#countries #europe #children #age #schools #skills #job #education #students #world #work #reason
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In Europe, there were few countries where kids receive real time skills by attending
to
being one more than one
two
 schools around an age of 11 or 13 in order to help them in getting a new job.
However
Linking Words
, other's opt for schooling with routine academic education. Schools must certainly follow proper path in
this
Linking Words
 regard. In
this
Linking Words
 essay I will discuss the necessary steps that are needed to be initiated by the schools in order to make the brighter students, in terms of educational and cognitive skills. I will
also
Linking Words
 provide the reasons for the same.
Also
Linking Words
, I will include realistic instances from my own life.
Firstly
Linking Words
, all the rudimentary subjects which enhance the cognitive skills and motor skills, should be incorporated as a part of child's class. Certainly preference should be given to
such
Linking Words
 type of subjects, regardless of the age, because these skills are very crucial for the growth of a child in terms of knowledge. Recent times, few schools in Toronto like Montessori and Bhashyam had shown an impressive term results for their students.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, schools should
also
Linking Words
 hire talented tutor's to teach their children. In my view,
such
Linking Words
 type of teacher's not only educate children, but
also
Linking Words
 nurture the kids with practical awareness.
For instance
Linking Words
, Adam's school in Canada stood in
first
Linking Words
 place for the
last
Linking Words
 3 year's and the secret behind its success is their power packed training staff. To conclude, I definitely feel schooling must include fundamental subjects as a part of routine studies and
also
Linking Words
 incorporate sophisticated mentors too.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: