Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies you think is better?

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It is common to witness that there are schools allowing the students to have the freedom to wear their desire clothing, while some don’t. Each way has its own pros and cons come from different perspectives;
however
, the way I think b
etter way
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the better way
a better way
is the uniform choice. Come
first
with the decision of letting the students wearing what they want,
this
might benefit for their confidence and comfort. U
niform
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The uniform
isn’t a really matter part i
n comes
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income
incomes
of students’ education, the brain work with the physically comfortable bring the e
ffiency
the ratio of the output to the input of any system
efficiency
agency
for their study. In Vietnam, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
can see the stress of the students when they a
re not liked
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don't like
the uniform and it affects the work that students put in.
Besides
that, making uniforms brings a lot of budget for the people who bought them, which the money can be transferred f
or
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to
a better f
unds
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fund
like accessories or community’s charity.
On the other hand
, the official clothes for the students can resolve many p
roblem
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problems
that o
ccurs
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occur
in learners’ identity. Many students have different backgrounds, come from various origins, can have many isolated issues about the discrimination, e
speacially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
from the rich and poor can be easily seen. From that, the students can learn about the discipline and the respect from each other in the school h
ours.
a dwelling that serves as living quarters for one or more families
house
In conclusion, putting on same clothes may be boring for s
ome one,
a human being
someone
and it is really getting n
erve
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nervous
for them to concentrate on their work. Uniform is a thing that can help connect the students together because it does not acquire the gap between the rich and the poor, which can d
evelope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
a crucial skill for the learners.

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