In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that adding effects in the advertisement is very necessary.
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approach has contributed so much to giving
customers
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an in-depth, objective view of the product. But everything has both negative and positive. On the one hand, let's talk about the positives. Each
company
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wants to emphasize their products are new because
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method can bring back economic stability.
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, after the Covid 19, farmers couldn't sell fruits because of the low quality after the disease outbreak. Many companies convert challenges into opportunities. They take advantage of unsold fruit and create something edible things. They have to emphasize that the idea is new and unnormal, it's from dragon fruit to dragon fruit instant noodles, that strange idea can help the farmer have money for their family and
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can know more about the
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.
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, if they misuse the effect in an advertisement, they will have "a taste of your own medicine". They usually invite a famous,
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to support but it takes too much money so if they want fame they have to pay dearly. Go big or go home! They have to pay large amounts of money to do some advertising. The businesses advertise add effect, they make it a wonderful, delicious, tremendous look but it's counterproductive. But in reality, the items that
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buy are dull colour, low-quality, scandal,..etc.
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, if someone orders green tea which is a new drink, trendy and high-quality but they give the customer a low-quality green tea, not like expected. They will vote 1 star and that
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will be criticized. In conclusion,
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a double-edged sword as the advertisement can be good since
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will get what they want and the
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will form an emerging engagement of consumers.
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, with just 1 mistake, they have to pay dearly more and more, and the worst is bankruptcy.
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The essay presents a balanced view on the topic, discussing both positive and negative aspects of advertising new products. However, the introduction could be made clearer by explicitly stating the reasons why businesses emphasize the newness of their products.
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Ensure that examples are directly relevant to the points being made. The example about dragon fruit instant noodles is good, but the execution could be clearer and more directly tied to the argument.
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Work on improving the logical flow and structure of your paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting points are directly tied to this idea.
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Some sentences are a bit awkward and could be more effectively phrased. Try to ensure that transitions between ideas and paragraphs are smooth and logical.
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The essay attempts to address both positive and negative aspects of the topic, which shows an effort to provide a well-rounded response.
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The idea of how businesses transforming unsold fruit into instant noodles is interesting and relevant.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and provides a clear ending to the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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