Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion