Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I definitely agree with the statement that once
children
get admission in
school, Change preposition
to
teachers
have more impact on them than even their parents
. A number of arguments surround my opinion. To begin
with, children
spend quality time
with teachers
. Although
they spend more time
with parents
at home but
Remove the conjunction
apply
this
time
is not as productive as the small amount of time
spent with teachers
. We all know that parents
are busy with their work most of the time
and even if children
are around, they hardly pay any attention to them. Teachers
, on the other
hand
are in school for the Add the comma(s)
hand,
students
. All the time
they are either teaching the students
or guiding them in extra -cu rricu la r
activities. They keep Correct word choice
extracurricular
children
focused on study and as a
result
have Add a comma
result,
more
intellectual impact on them. What is more, Correct article usage
a more
teachers
are role models for students
. They are scholars in action. They not only influence
intellectually but Verb problem
apply
socially
. Rephrase
also socially
Students
inadvertently follow their teachers
' behaviour too. They observe how the teacher walks, talks and tackles difficult situations. At home
they have Add a comma
home,
parents
to guide them socially, but it is seen that in nuclear families, parents
hardly find time
for this
. Whatever social skills children
learn are from TV or other activities they do at home. So definitely teachers
have an edge over parents
even as far as social skills are concerned. Teachers
also
guide students
for
their future careers. Change preposition
in
Students
follow teachers
more than parents
because they feel that teachers
are more aware of the world around them and they have better capability of guiding them. So, they depend on teachers
more than parents
. To conclude
, it can be said that once the
schooling starts, Correct article usage
apply
teachers
and parents
both have influence
but Correct article usage
an influence
teachers
influence children
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion