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According to a survey, people involved in certain occupations and professions are seen to be honest. What is the situation in your country? Why?

Being honest is one of the best ways to
show
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 your ethics. A survey suggests that masses engaged in some careers are more truthful than others.
This
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 situation exists all over the world and my country is not an exception to it.
Although
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 all professionals should be genuine, some line of
work
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 cannot afford to be dishonest as they have to
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 highest standard of integrity to survive for a long run. To embark with, my country
also
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 has
certain group
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a certain group
 of professional who are more honest than others. People working as doctors, teachers and
lawers
a professional person authorized to practice law; conducts lawsuits or gives legal advice
lawyers
 are a few examples of
such
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work
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 groups.
For instance
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, people working in
medical industry
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the medical industry
has
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have
 to be honest with their patient as they cannot
affort
be able to spare or give up
afford
 to do incorrect diagnosis as it may lead to major impact on the person who is under treatment.
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, an educator not only has to be candid in term to giving feedback to the students so that they can attain success in their lives, but
also
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 lead by example to
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 a correct path to the pupils. Indeed, these careers require enormous
genuinity
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 in terms of their
work
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 ethics
otherwise
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 they will lose their credibility among the masses which can be a major setback to the society.
In addition
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, some trades
has
Suggestion
have
 to maintain a certain degree of honesty to sustain for a longer period. A businessman cannot
affort
be able to spare or give up
afford
effort
 to cheat his
stake holders
someone entrusted to hold the stakes for two or more persons betting against one another; must deliver the stakes to the winner
stakeholders
 if he wants to sustain and grow his business. Deceiving will not only hamper existing customers as they would not tolerate the breach of trust, but
also
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 prevent new clients as public want to deal with someone who has good credibility.
For instance
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, if a restaurant chain is found using stale ingredients in their
kichen
a room equipped for preparing meals
kitchen
kitchens
 they will lose the existing as well as prospective consumers. Clearly, if a business is truthful to its clients, it can grow and survive
for
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in
 a long term as people want to continue
relationship
Suggestion
the relationship
a relationship
 with entities whom they trust. In conclusion,
although
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 not everyone can be as honest as we expect, some groups of
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work
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workers
has
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have
 to
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 immense sincerity towards their end users to build the trust as its
back bone
a central cohesive source of support and stability
backbone
 of nobility professions
such
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 as teaching and remain in competition for a
longer
Suggestion
long
 time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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