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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both society and individuals. To what extent do you agree.

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In
this
 modern era, World is achieving new heights in every sector of technology, especially social networking. A group of populace make emphasis on the negative influences of using social sites
on
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for
 people and community.
This
 essay will discuss the major advantages of using social media
first
 than teething troubles of
such
 sites on both individual and
civilization
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civilizations
. Every country is a diverse country. Using social networking sites
bring
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brings
 all the people together. People with different cultures and different localities upload their pictures, stories that connect the other people with their culture.
Moreover
, people with special talent can show their art to the world using social media. The impact of social media has
clear advantage
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the clear advantage
a clear advantage
clear advantages
on
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of
 both, individual and society. Communication becomes extremely easy for the people sitting miles apart from each other.
For instance
, I can make a call to my family from Canada to India just by pressing call button on Facebook.
On the other hand
, every pros
has
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have
 some cons too. People used to spend their most of the time on social media rather to talk to each other.
Thus
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Thus, this
this
 is creating trouble in relationships as there is bad communication of the people with their loved ones. People went
in
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into
 depression due to no communication,
hence
spoling
the process of becoming spoiled
spoiling
sprawling
sailing
 nation. To conclude,
although
 social sites
has brought
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have brought
 so much difference in individuals due to over spending time on social media. The community should always balance out the time that they should spend with their loved ones and on social sites.

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