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In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.To what extent do you agree?

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Most of the nation today, parents are capable of deciding which schools they want to send their children to, single-sex academy or co-educational academy. As s result, some think that going to single-sex academy may cause children some drawbacks when they grow older. I partly agree with
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 perspective and the essay will discuss on both sides. Everything happens for a reason and why people say that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.
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 of all, As for a girl or a boy, when not contacting a friend of the opposite sex might make the lose the capability of communication when they get out of school and start to live in a real world. It causes them some troubles when working and talking with the opposite-gender person, that they may not understand them and even
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, while other children who go to mixed schools have an opportunity to learn many new things from their opposite-gender friends as boys teach girls sports and girls help boys in some subjects, or they can support each other in any situation.
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 helps them not to be contradicted with any religious beliefs like Islamic belief.
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, they are taught to respect their opposite gender by both teachers and parents.
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 the other perspective, going to single-sex schools have some specific upsides that only children can receive. As a child when receiving a single-sex education, they are able to concentrate
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 their study rather than being interrupted by love and bullies in school.
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, if a girl ever falls in love with a boy, they will never pay attention to her study and so will the boys. In conclusion,
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 in some countries, single-sex schools are not common, and do not give parents many options to choose as being lack of budget.
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, because of not being very common,
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 still a green light to those supporting co-educational schools as for a brighter future of children.

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