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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These figures depict the construction of
a
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apply
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LadyBrid
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ladybird
 and its
life
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 period. It is clear from the figures that the
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ladybrid
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ladybird
life
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was
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occurred in four
changed
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 in its
life
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 till it becomes
adult
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an adult
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ladybrid
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ladybird
.
According to
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 what is shown , The right figure
explain
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 the body of
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the ladybrid
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ladybrid
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ladybird
ladybirds
.The top part of its body is a head and contains
of
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two eyes, two
antenno
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antenna
 and
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a prontum
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prontum
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pronotum
.
Also
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 the body composite from Red Elystra
which
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exist
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exists
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 in
wing
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the wing
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 .
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Also
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 it has four legs and the bottom part is Abdomen . The left figure is shown the
life
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 period of the
ladybride
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ladybird
lady bride
, the first stage when the leaf became its age 2-5
days
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 .
Then
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 it passes through the larval stage
about
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nearlly
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nearly
 21
days
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.
While
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 the leaf passes the pupa stage
was took
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 about 7
days
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 .
Finally
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, we have
a
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an
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 adult
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ladybrid
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ladybird
.
To sum up
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, we could say that the
life
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 period of the
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ladybrid
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ladybird
take
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 about 33
days
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 starting with the leaf and
developed
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developing
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unitill
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until
 the
complated
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completed
 adult
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ladybrid
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ladybird
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ladybrid, life, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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