The school Library is seeking applicants for job over summer break. Write a letter to the library's manager, In the letter include: A brief introduction of yourself Your experience and relevant skills Why you want the job Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writing

this

letter regarding the

job

posting of clerk in the library throughout the summer. I have filled out the standard application which I have found on the website. My name is Jagdeep and I am an international student from India. I have recently enrolled in

MBA

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an MBA

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at York University. I had previous experience as a data entry clerk at Brain Limited from year 2017 to 2019 and I had gained knowledge about time and management. I have

also

worked with GCG Limited as an administration officer from the year 2020 to 2021. As

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apply

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I had earlier

job

experience quite like what these

job

responsibilities are I think I am the will right candidate for the

job

. I

also

enjoy organizing things and helping other people. I am available full-time during my summer break. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Jagdeep

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coherence cohesion

Although your letter is clear, try to use more varied sentence structures to improve readability and engagement.

task achievement

You might want to proofread for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as 'As, I had earlier job experience quite like what these job responsibilities are I think I am the will right candidate for the job.' This can enhance the overall clarity and professionalism of your letter.

task achievement

You have included all necessary components in your letter, such as a brief introduction, experience and skills, and your reason for applying.

coherence cohesion

Your closing is polite and professional.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

145 words

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