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Some people prefer to spend lives doing the same thing and avoid any changes. Others, however, think that changes in always a good things. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Most of the individuals believe that, working in a same field or spending their crucial lifetime in a similar manner is a
beneficial
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more beneficial
 rather than taking a risk,
However other
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However, other
 mention that, life is only one, we should
utilized
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utilize
 it in different ways.I will
discus
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 about both the views and what
is
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are
prons
in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)
pros
 and cons?. It is generally believe that, living life in a decent way is better to do nothing and maximum
individualson
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individuals on
individual son
 our world following same schedule and they don't want to make any sort of change, because, might be they have phobia about losing what they earn in yesterdays,
for instance
, a person is enjoying
they
of them or themselves
their
 lifestyle and suddenly he thought about business and open a new cloth store, Despite from
earninggg
earn on some commercial or business transaction; earn as salary or wages
earning
learning
 more as more to before, he got
a
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an
 incidence and lose all money and home.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
this
 sort of thin make people reserved and lose their hope as well.
On the other hand
, there
are certain group of
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are a certain group of
 people who
vehemthly
 contend that, the lifestyle change is very important and always entertain themselves.
This
people are mostly believe
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person, mostly believes
person are mostly believe
person mostly believes
people mostly believes
people is mostly believed
people is mostly believing
 in
imaginary world
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an imaginary world
imaginary worlds
 and fate, to illustrate
this
 kind of people is challenging himself with new adventure and taking easily any sort of challenges.
furthurmore
in addition
Furthermore
Furthurmore
, sometime the situation will be difficult and
extinct their
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extinct, their
 value,
for example
a
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an
employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employer
 is working in a MLC
Although
, another company is offering him high paid salaries and he accepted
job letter
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a job letter
the job letter
, he could not find out difficulties now
,
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,
but in future if he want new jobs might be, they will not
getting
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get
 jobs because of bad impression or record. In
conclusion,
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this conclusion, it
this
 it is evident from all discussion till now that both
argument
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arguments
 carry refuted.
Nonethless
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Nonetheless
, I personally subscribe to the preposition, both the intricate and
extrov
more than is needed, desired, or required
extra
 persons better there places and they should not take any change in their lifestyle.

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