The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate fast food in restaurants between 2003 and 2013
The given graph shows the incidence of
Americans
who ate fast
food
in
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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over a period of ten years from 2003 to 2013 As a general rule,it is quite obvious that almost half of
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Americans
ate junk
food
in eateries either once a
week
or more than a few times a
week
between 2003 and 2013.It can be seen that in the later period of
time
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more people choose not to eat fatty
food
, any more. As the bar graph depicts ,almost
one
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one-third
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third
of the American population opted to eat fast
food
in
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berries
batteries
once a
week
in 2003 and the ratio increased by some percentage over
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three years before it dropped to just over 25
percent
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in 2013.Almost the same proportion of
Americans
preferred fatty
food
once or twice a month and their ratio went higher over time. Again ,around 13 %
US
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citizens ate at fast
food
shops and the ratio increased slightly over the
next
seven years.Interestingly ,the people of America who had fast
food
meals on daily basis were less than 5
percent
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and
this
number decreased
further
the rest of the decade.Folks who consumed junk
food
over a
week
were around 17
percent
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per cent
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and it raised up to 20 % in 2006 before it halted to just over 15
percent
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.In the
end
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it can be seen that many
Americans
who used fast
food
frequently
had
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stopped doing so after a decade

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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