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Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

#gadgets #people #products #creativity
The
use
 of
latest laptops
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the latest laptops
,
Accept space
,
phones is highly increased by young persons. Creative power has
declined with
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declined to use
declined to use of
declined in use of
use
 of these devices.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement as
use
Suggestion
the use
 of
varoius
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
 apps of these products helps to learn new skills and increases imagination power. Modern gadgets like phones raise
youths
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youths'
 creativity. By using apps available in phones young people learn new skills at home without going outside and increase their productivity.
For example
, my sister has learned to knit by watching knitting on
phone
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the phone
a phone
 using
you tube
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YouTube
youtube
 app. Smart devices
also
 increase
imagintion
the formation of a mental image of something that is not perceived as real and is not present to the senses
imagination
 of youngsters by raising their thinking ability.
This
 is to say that when young persons
use
 laptops, phones, video games, their mind
think
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thinks
 new ideas.
For instance
, latest smart phones are smarter than previous phones because of
latest technology apps thought
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the latest technology apps thought
by
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of
in
 young peoples mind. To conclude, modern devices have increased
creative power
Suggestion
the creative power
creative powers
 of youngsters by proving easy methods to learn skills and focusing them to do more with these devices.

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