Childood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsilbility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?

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Dear Ayana, Hello!
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you can call me just Gyul and I'm Jong-won's cousin. I requested him that connect with you. Because I want to know about Japan. Specially your home town Osaka! My major is Japanese so, professor gave us a report
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I choose Osaka due to locate nearby my home town Busan. Anyway,
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the free pass card
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. How to buy that card? Thank you to read my letter, I'll wait your reply, Jong-won's cousin Gyul

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • monitor
  • responsibility
  • nutrition
  • physical activities
  • primary responsibility
  • complement
  • mandatory
  • limiting
  • availability
  • junk food
  • canteens
  • collaborative efforts
  • comprehensive approach
  • limitations
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