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Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In the modern era, People are always confused when they think of some gifts that need to give to the youth due to the variety of options available.While some people think
money
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 is the best
gift
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 that they can give as it removes the pain of giver in making choices the product along with the features that teenagers are always looking for; I think, offering
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 to the young ones can involve them in malicious activity and gifts are considered as a symbol of remembrance.
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, these days teenagers have a different type of choices for gifts,
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 as, digital games and electronic gadgets while some of people may not have much knowledge about it.
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, the adults may purchase simple traditional gifts, which may not be liked by them.
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,
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 could be proven as a best presenting option.
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, it is observed that parents or older people while purchasing a
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, they may not check all the features as well as material while buying it and it may be useless for the receiver.
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, parents gifting a watch to their son or daughter
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youth would check for modern feature like world clock, stop watch and so on, while parents look out for basic feature of time displayed is accurate or not. If those modern features are not present,
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 would make them unhappy,
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 an expensive
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 is gifted.
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,
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 should not be given to younger children as they are not mature enough to decide where to spend the
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. It is possible that cash might be spent on activity like gambling. They may buy items that are not age appropriate or items that are hazardous.
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, some of these youngsters may develop a bad habit
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 as smoking or become a drug addict because they have cash to purchase whatever they want. In
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 way, they may squander the gifted
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.
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, other offerings like electronic gadget or
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 card should be given to them to avoid unnecessary spending and buying.
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, gifts are reminders and when a person looks at the present,
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 he or she remembers the person who presented it and
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, a
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gift
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 cannot take the place of the gifts in kind because people often forget about the cash presents. To illustrate, a person who has gifted a sports shoe to run for the marathon run, will always be remembered. In conclusion, I opine that, though people give
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 as a
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 to teenagers, but purchase a product
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, will generate a mere feeling of love and closeness.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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