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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Providing access to healthcare
services
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 is a fundamental concern for governments around the world. Some argued that free basic medical
services
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 should be provided by all nations, to their citizens, without including advanced and expensive
treatments
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. I completely agree with
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 aforementioned notion, because it will be helpful to maintain equality among individuals of all statuses and balance the financial stability of the country. The main reason behind supporting
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 argument is that cost-free hospital
services
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 can save the lives of a number of people who are not able to afford even basic treatment. It means poor people who earn less than the minimum and fulfil their food necessities with difficulties; ignore their and families' health issues by concerned treatment bills, which in the end leads to a serious health disease. If they get money-free remedies, they can do regular checkups and live healthy lifestyles.
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 , by promoting free assistance, the government will raise equality among their residents without focusing on rich families. It implies, that
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 inflammation in living expenses not everyone can afford good medical care, so by having
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 service, everyone can go to the same hospitals without any discrimination.
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, in China, all the cities have at least 7 government hospitals, and
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 is the main reason, since
last
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 year, they experienced a 60% decrease in deaths by cured diseases
initially
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. Another compelling reason why I hold
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 idea is that it will not harm and affect the economic balance. Only providing minor
treatments
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 by excluding money-consuming
treatments
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 (
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 as cancer immunotherapy, and organ transplants) will be beneficial for both management
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 taxpayer, as they are getting their medications free of cost and councils are earning by getting paid for expensive medical care.
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, by doing so there will be less strain on the healthcare system as well seeing that dangerous diseases are curing at early stages, which needs high-priced equipment and specialists.
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, in Canada, most employers give health insurance to their workers for high-priced
treatments
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, which only require 30% from employees and are helpful to get affordable regular medical care. In conclusion, providing free medical
services
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 is crucial and should be implemented as soon as possible without costly medical assistance; because it will not only help natives to get affordable
treatments
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 on time but
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 be beneficial for councils to protect their nation and make the country healthy without misbalancing economic growth.

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introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction provides a clear thesis statement that outlines your opinion and the structure of your essay. This sets the stage effectively.
logical structure
Work on improving the logical flow between paragraphs to make your argument more cohesive. Topic sentences and concluding sentences should connect more clearly to strengthen transitions.
supported main points
Some points should be explored in more depth to add depth to your argument. Make sure that every argument presented is fully explained with supporting evidence.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to enhance clarity by avoiding overly complex sentences. Simpler sentence structures can improve readability and clarity.
complete response
The essay provides a clear and complete response to the prompt, addressing both the benefits of free healthcare and excluding costly treatments.
relevant specific examples
The use of specific examples, like the healthcare systems in China and Canada, effectively supports the main points and shows consideration of international approaches.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes your arguments and firmly restates your position on the issue, providing a strong finish to the essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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