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Some say Parents should be the one to make their children a good citizen in society. Others say it also the duty of schools. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#say #parents #children #citizen #society #duty #schools
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It is argued, that children in their earlier age should be taught to be a good and responsible citizen of a
society
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 by their parents. While
on the other hand
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,
school
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 is regarded as a
second
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 home for any kid, whereas, it is generally said that
school
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 is the place where a child must be informed by all the aspects of becoming a
good
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better
 individual in the
society
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. Well, I personally believe that it is the responsibility of both. Parents are the one who knows what is best for their kid, so choosing the best for them is
also
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 one of their important
duty
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duties
. Kids are easily attracted towards the things which are probably not
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for them. Telling
this
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 that it is not good for them in a way that they do not feel offended is
major task
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a major task
the major task
 during the character build up
practise
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the practise
.
Furthermore
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, parents should always treat their sons and
daugther
a female human offspring
daughters
 like a friend and be limitless in all
type
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types
 of conversation which really helps the child, as he would not feel scared in sharing anything with them.
Unfortunataly
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Unfortunately
, recent research by
a
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an
 NGO stated that people like murderers, rapist,
theifs
the act of taking something from someone unlawfully
thefts
theirs
 are mostly originated by the disturbed families where parents do not value them and become harsh on them because of their own problems,
however
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,
this
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 type of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 like being rude or strict to your kids leads to severe
remifications
the act of branching out or dividing into branches
ramifications
.
Nevertheless
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,
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school
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the school
also
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 plays an essential part in the character build up of a single person. As
school
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 is the place where a kid spend his time most till the age of 18 or 20's,
therefore
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, dynamics of
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school
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the school
 should be carefully handled by its faculty. The educational institutes should introduce an extra course in their curriculum regarding social responsibilities and be
determinent
characterized by great determination
determined
 in making them a good citizen of the
society
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 In the conclusion, I would like to share my own opinion that parent and
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school both
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school, both
 play a vital role in
childs
a young person of either sex
children
 brought up and making them a good person in the
society
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.
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