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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000 and 2020 and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000 and 2020 and future projections for 2025.
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 data shows three important exportation wealth of Southland which are international
tourism
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,
daily
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dairy
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products
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, and
meat
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products
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 in the
year
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 2000 and recent
year
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 and
also
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 point out the estimated revenues
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 the
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 2025. As the
overall
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 trend, an
export
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 of international
tourism
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 increases gradually
while
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meat
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products
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, as predicted, will be decreased slightly.
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,
dairy
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products'
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products
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 trend displays fluctuations. From 2000 until the recent day,
Dairy
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products
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 are the biggest proportion
export
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 wealth of Southland
follows
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 by international
tourism
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 and
meat
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products
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 respectively. It is clearly seen that international
tourism
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 has been continually developed in
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 area because
this
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export
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 has been rising marginally and it is expected to reach almost 10 billion
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euro
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 in 2025.
In contrast
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,
meat
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products
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 seem to be slowing down. The
overall
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export
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 trend of
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 fell gradually from 6 to 5.5 billion
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euro
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euros
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 and will continue to decline to 5 billion
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euro
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euros
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 in 2025. As shown in the figures, the
export
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 of
dairy
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products
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 has
been
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changed rapidly in recent
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year
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years
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 but it was estimated that the 500 million
euro
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reducing
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 will occur in 2025. Nowadays, it can be seen that
dairy
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 product has the highest
export
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 wealth,
although
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 in the past it was international
tourism
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.
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, it is true that
meat
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products
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 play the smallest part in the country’s
export
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 in every period. In 2025, it is projected that international
tourism
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 will be
at
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the biggest part of country exportation again and in the meantime, the other two types of
export
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products
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 will reduce slightly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, products, meat, year, export, dairy, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, main exports, projections, trends, significant changes, increased, decreased, speculate, external factors, global demand, technological advancements, trade policies, agriculture, technology, manufacturing, economic implications, employment, GDP, economic growth, global economic trends
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