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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000 and 2020 and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000 and 2020 and future projections for 2025.
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This
 data shows three important exportation wealth of Southland which are international
tourism
,
daily
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dairy
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products
, and
meat
products
 in the
year
 2000 and recent
year
 and
also
 point out the estimated revenues
of
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 the
year
 2025. As the
overall
 trend, an
export
 of international
tourism
 increases gradually
while
meat
products
, as predicted, will be decreased slightly.
However
,
dairy
products'
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products
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 trend displays fluctuations. From 2000 until the recent day,
Dairy
products
 are the biggest proportion
export
 wealth of Southland
follows
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followed
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 by international
tourism
 and
meat
products
 respectively. It is clearly seen that international
tourism
 has been continually developed in
this
 area because
this
export
 has been rising marginally and it is expected to reach almost 10 billion
euro
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euros
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 in 2025.
In contrast
,
meat
products
 seem to be slowing down. The
overall
export
 trend of
this
 fell gradually from 6 to 5.5 billion
euro
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euros
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 and will continue to decline to 5 billion
euro
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euros
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 in 2025. As shown in the figures, the
export
 of
dairy
products
 has
been
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changed rapidly in recent
year
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years
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 but it was estimated that the 500 million
euro
reducing
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 will occur in 2025. Nowadays, it can be seen that
dairy
 product has the highest
export
 wealth,
although
 in the past it was international
tourism
.
However
, it is true that
meat
products
 play the smallest part in the country’s
export
 in every period. In 2025, it is projected that international
tourism
 will be
at
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the biggest part of country exportation again and in the meantime, the other two types of
export
products
 will reduce slightly.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, products, meat, year, export, dairy, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, main exports, projections, trends, significant changes, increased, decreased, speculate, external factors, global demand, technological advancements, trade policies, agriculture, technology, manufacturing, economic implications, employment, GDP, economic growth, global economic trends
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