The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The news
reported by media has
collosally
in a close relation or position in time or space
closely
been addressed to concern and critical situations around
in contrast
to optimistic growth these
days which
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days, which
has been scathing either person or
popullation
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
populations
in some or other way. I completely agree with above said statement
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Firstly
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In
this
fast running era
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when they have actually limited amount of time to see news
,
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people want to be happy and seeks positive developmental reports which are quenchable
and and
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and
not concerned
to
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with
problems
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Furthermore
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,
media
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the media
should focus on women empowerment and
thier
of them or themselves
their
growth in society
.
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For example
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In 2007
,
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,
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
times reported that there were only 30 percent women who use to go to work
in contrast
to which in 2019 growth of working female was reported to
plunged
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plunge
nearly 50 times
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Instead
media focus more on loot
,
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,
laundering
,
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,
fraud
,
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,
political issues which had
tendency
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tended
to cause mental trauma and depression
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Also
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Media forget to focus on infrastructure and economic development
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In upcoming time, India is going to become booming economy as world have
lot number
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a lot number
of investors to invest
on
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in
developing nation
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developing nations
.
For instance
,
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Recently
,
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The Jeff Bejos
,
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World leading
enterpreuner
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneur
interpreter
came to
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
indie
and signed
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
proposal worth 5 billion
dollard
the basic monetary unit in many countries; equal to 100 cents
dollars
to be invested in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
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Although
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Such
positive news remained uncovered by
media whereas
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media, whereas
they will focus more on news like student
been
the state or fact of existing
being
threatened in university hostel campus as
thy
people in general
they
suspect one of the
student
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students
to be a terrorist
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To wrap it
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I conclude by saying that media plays
vital role
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a vital role
and leaves impression on
youth
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the youth
of our country by every statement they come up with
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
they need to come up with news which depicts
positive developmental aspect
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positive developmental aspects
a positive developmental aspect
of our nations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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