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Some people believe that space exploration is beneficial to humanity. Others, however, think that it is useless. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that
space
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 research is
favorable trend
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a favourable trend
favourable trend
 for humans and the Earth, whereas others put forward the view that it is of no use and waste of money. I support the former statement because studying outer
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 is likely to resolve pressing issues on our
planet
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. On the one hand,
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 exploration is widely criticized as a waste of valuable money. Indeed, every year, governments around the world allocate billions of dollars for doing the research, creating and launching spacecraft. Unfortunately, many rockets fail to bring expected results to scientists. NASA,
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, has sent about 10 rockets since 2000, none of which were able to find signs of
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 that sustain humans.
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, in my opinion, discovering
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 on another
planet
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 would be a back-up plan for humanity. To be more specific, if
planet
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 Earth becomes uninhabitable due to overpopulation or climate change, our civilization will have to colonize to alien
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 to survive. To illustrate, Elon Musk came up with an idea to create a city with a million inhabitants on Mars, which is the result of years of studies on the
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.
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, learning about
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 will provide in-depth knowledge on our
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 itself and upcoming dangers.
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 can be handy in terms of natural disasters or meteors that can devastate
life
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 on Earth. Five years ago, there was an asteroid coming to collide with Earth, when Japanese scholars had already studied it and terminated with a nuclear bomb beyond our ozone layer. To conclude, whether to study
life
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 beyond our
planet
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 or not is a controversial topic. Despite the huge amount of costs involved, I strongly believe that
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 exploration might facilitate to avoid disasters and help civilization to continue.
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