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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Despite the fact that it is believed that some people tend to register their kids in separate schools, I believe boys and girls will benefit more by interacting with the same
school
. In
this
 essay, I am going to shed some light on
both
 these views and
also
 add my own opinion. As a matter of fact, there are some beliefs that children should attend a
school
 which only their own
gender
 is educating. Obviously, as I used to be a student in Iran, which mixed schools are so rare and expensive, I have educated from a separate system. Indeed,
this
 experience could not help me get along pretty well with boys.
This
 kind of
school
, mostly are religious and I suppose
this
 might not be the field that we want our kids to learn while they are at
school
.
Also
 attending these institutes will not give the chance to juveniles to get to know the opposite sex. I myself did not get to have any boyfriends until I got accepted to University,
for instance
. On the flip side, there are many more advantages for our junior to go to mixed schools.
Moreover
, studying in an atmosphere with different
gender
 would make a competition between boys and girls which can help them to improve their scores.
Furthermore
, there is another chance for
both
 groups to get to know the differences between themselves and their opposite-sex
both
 physically and mentally since they are so young.
For example
, after a few years of being friends and trying to know about each other differences and attitudes, kids get to get along better not only with their own
gender
 but
also
 with the opposites. In conclusion,
additionally
 to all information above and as someone who never got the chance of being educated in mixed institute, I think trying to help our own kid to have more communication with
both
gender
 at the same time will benefit their future lifestyle and
also
 their relationship.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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