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The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics --DELETED LINK--

The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics --DELETED LINK--
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The table gives information
of
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 social and economic indicators for
Canada
,
Japan
,
Peru
, and
Zaire
 as stated by the United Nations statistics in 1994, As is observed from the given data,
Canada
 and
Japan
 had
a
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far better economic and social conditions
comparing
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 the other two.
Overall
, the highest annual
income
 is 15.100
dollars
 in
Japan
, followed by
Canada
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annual
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income
 per person
15.760
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dollars
. The
third
 highest, annual
income
 is 160
dollars
 in
Peru
.
While
 the lowest
in
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Zairu
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Zaire
 with
the
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income
 of 130
dollars
. Life expectancy that showed in the table gives information that the highest life expectancy is 78 years in
Japan
,
and
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the
second
 is 76 years in
Canada
 followed by 51 in
Peru
, and the lowest is 47 years old in
Zaire
.
Moreover
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 the adult literacy rate in
Canada
 is 99% same as
Japan
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in Japan
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, followed by
Peru
68
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at 68
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% and the
last
 one is
Zaire
34
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at 34
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% In Conclusion,
Japan
 and
Canada
 were two socially and economically developed countries.
However
,
Peru
 and
Zaire
 were two undeveloped countries with poor life expectancy,
earning
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earnings
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, food supply, and literacy rates.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, peru, zaire, income, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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