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Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #internet
It is irrefutable that the
internet
play
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plays
 a significant role in our
life
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lives
 and becoming popular among people at
vast rate
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a vast rate
vast rates
. Some people assert that the
internet
 has
lot
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lots
 of benefit, whereas other assumes it has
create
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created
 more problem. In my opinion, there are certain benefit of the
internet
 yet it is hard to overlook its drawback. In
this
 essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would shed light on both in details before conclusion can be drawn. There are several benefits of
internet
.
Firstly
, the
internet
 help in many
way
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ways
 to access someone easily. For an example, in official work with the help of the
internet
 sending email to others within a few moments while sending a paper letter takes at least couple of days.
Moreover
, it is fact that the
internet
 gives many information and educational knowledge all the
world
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worlds
. For an instance,
student
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students
a student
 can access different educational sites to get information and learn new things.
On the contrary
 side, now a days, there are many different types of scam involves in the
internet
.
In other words
,
such
 as cyber crime, access someone personal details and hacking details. There is no doubt, according to the
survey 50
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survey, 50
 percent of online banking scam is increasing for
last
 few years by advertising fake ads on
internet
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the internet
. Other reasons is
impact
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impacting
 on
youngster
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the youngster
by
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of
 showing violent content online. To put in a nutshell,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 pen down and say that if there are
profit
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profits
 of
internet
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the internet
 as well there is
also
drawback
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a drawback
the drawback
 of
internet
. It
depend
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depends
 on us how we can minimize side effect and aware other folks from scam.
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  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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