In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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There are many examples when countries had to impose curfew and restrictions on its own citizens. These restrictions and curfews depend upon the situation or turmoil which the country
is been facing
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has been facing
is facing
,
for example
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, political unrest or may be increased rate of crimes against the children/teenagers. Later is the reason because of which, in some areas of
US
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the US
, teenagers are strictly prohibited to be involved in outdoor activities without being accompanied by an adult after a certain
time
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. Not only teenagers are often seen as a soft and easy target by the
criminals but
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criminals, but
also
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teenage is the period of life in which one is attracted more often towards the activities which should have been avoided at that
time
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. Criminal cases against the citizen like that of robbery, snatching and street mugging
are often reported
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is often reported
to happen at a very
higher
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high
rate after a certain
time
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at night as compared to the other times of the day. These criminals roam in the city with an advantage of darkness to cover their identity. Mostly they choose targets who are not going to resist and teenagers are most likely to be targeted,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
when spotted alone. It is human tendency to get attracted by the things and objects that are harmful and
also
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the activities that are often prohibited before a certain age and should be avoided. Teenage is the
time
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of human life when one is still confused on making
decision
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the decision
a decision
decisions
of what is good and what is not for himself or the society.
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example I
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example, I
have myself seen many teenagers getting involved in smoking and drugs just because they feel it makes them look cool and
smarter
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smart
. Teenagers are going to be the future of the society. So, if a curfew is imposed in some areas on outside movement of teenagers without any adult being with them, after certain night
time
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is totally fine. It is the duty and responsibility of the state to take any necessary actions to take care of its citizens,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
the ones who are going to become the future stakeholders of the society. Desperate times need desperate measures.

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