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Band 8.5

You recently stayed at a hotel and had a very pleasant experience. Write a letter to the hotel manager to thank them for the excellent service. In your letter:  describe when and why you stayed at the hotel,  mention specific things you liked about the service or facilities,  express your appreciation and say you would recommend the hotel to others.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my pleasure with the service that I received from your staff in my journey to Turkey from 10th to 20th May.
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, I chose your
hotel
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 because I saw the advertisement on the Internet and the comments that were given were excellent. I booked one luxury room at a reasonable price , one day cost 100$. I stayed in your
hotel
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 for 10 days during my trip to Turkey with my husband. The first excellent thing that I want to mention is cleaners, waiters and chefs were polite and quick. Whenever I asked cleaners about problems or wishes, they all took the initiative to solve them. The chef’s meals were delicious and fantastic. My husband has an allergy to potatoes, when we told him pertaining to
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 problem, he tried to make special dishes for him. I was impressed and was very happy that I chose your
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. Meanwhile, the other thing is the opportunities that your governments provide for visitors. There were all the amenities
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 as a hospital, needed clothes and basic things. It was crucial for me when I searched the accommodation. I am grateful to you since you are a good manager and doing your work exceptionally well. I will recommend your
hotel
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 to my friends and family members to visit your
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. Yours faithfully, Susana Gomes

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coherence and cohesion
Consider separating your adjectives from nouns (e.g., 'The meals prepared by the chef were not only delicious but also fantastic').
task achievement
Try to avoid redundancy; mentioning that your husband has an allergy to potatoes can be more concise (e.g., 'The chef kindly prepared special dishes to accommodate his allergy').
task achievement
Your letter is warm and polite, which is appropriate for this context, and you express gratitude effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Your descriptions of service details create a clear image of your experience, making your letter engaging.
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