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Younger employees have more skills, knowledge and more motivated than older employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your argument with your own experience.

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There are some people who opine that young employees possess more skills,
knowledge
 and higher levels of motivation than senior employees working in the same organization. While I do admit that they have more technical skills, in my opinion, their level of
knowledge
 and motivation are more or less on a par with those of senior employers. The main advantage that young employees have over senior employees is that they are more tech-savvy. Youngsters grew up in the age of
technology
. They are adept at using all modern gadgets and technologies. Organizations especially those working at the cutting edge of
technology
 require
this
 expertise of young people and
hence
 they give preference to them while recruiting people.
For example
, in the information
technology
 (IT) sector
technology
 becomes outdated pretty fast. They need engineers who are well-versed in the latest programming languages and hardware technologies. Needless to say, most people employed in
this
 sector are youngsters. Even so, it is not possible to say that youngsters possess more
knowledge
 or motivation than seniors.
Knowledge
 does not necessarily mean only technological
knowledge
. While youngsters certainly have an advantage over seniors in matters of
technology
, it is not possible to say that their
knowledge
 of other aspects of work or life is more.
Likewise
, the argument that they possess a higher level of self-motivation
also
 sounds frivolous to me. Young people are less serious than seniors about their career. Actually, people in their 20’s are more concerned about enjoying their life than making significant contributions to their organization. In conclusion, young people certainly possess more technical skills than older people.
However
, I do not agree with the argument that they possess more
knowledge
 or self-motivation.
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