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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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It is thought by many individuals that Social networking sites,
for instance
 Facebook, have had a detrimental effect
on individual person
Suggestion
on an individual person
 as well as on communities. In my opinion, the effects of
such
 sites have been proven mostly beneficial for individuals.
However
, I agree that for local communities and societies, their influence is mostly on the negative side. With regards to individuals, the effect is exceptionally positive and has its own advantages.
Firstly
, Facebook and other social networking sites have brought the people together who are staying far and in different countries. Before the development of
such
 a technology, it would be extremely rare for
such
 people to meet or even come across each other.
Secondly
, it
also
 allows people who share common interests to form a group online among themselves and share their ideas, thoughts, get suggestions, help each other and even discuss on it.
On the other hand
, the effect of these sites on societies and communities
have had been
Suggestion
has been
is
was
 pessimistic. Individuals are becoming least interested in their community activities and leaning more towards other people who are online.
Consequently
, people are becoming disjointed and fragmented from their immediate society and spending more time with people with whom their possibility of meeting is extremely rare or negligible in the future. To conclude,
although
 Facebook and other
such
 sites have brought people together, they have not had the similar positive impact on communities and societies. Local communities should do more to involve people in activities to promote the future of community life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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