New technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

Technology is inevitable in
this
world. Revolution in technological sector has immensely impacted little one's leisure
time
. Children are becoming more and more addictive towards new gadgets and
also
, it has become
status symbol
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a status symbol
the status symbol
amongst affluent kids.
This
essay is going to discuss both merits and demerits of youngsters using new high tech appliances in free
time
. Interaction with new gadgets and using them for their academics can be
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
grateful
for young beings. In free
time
if children are involved with appliances which indulge them in
advancement
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the advancement
of their career. Right use of the technology is the key because these children are our future, which helps in moving them to their right track. To cite an example, a student who was working as a sweeper in railway station cleared IRTS exam by using free WiFi services in
railway station
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a railway station
railway stations
the railway station
in his free
time
. So it can be said that utilization of these
technolgy
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technologies
technology
is important in
right direction
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the right direction
. Little ones are becoming addictive to these high
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
gadgets in their leisure
time
. They are becoming unknown to the outside world and what it has to offer to them.
This
has led to diseases in young
age which
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age, which
was never seen before. To
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
, teenagers are becoming so much involved in these
devices they
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devices, they
don't even have
time
to eat or sleep. Many cases are being summoned up for these actions and many governments are
also
trying to limit the use of these devices. Misusing of
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
can lead in
students career
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a student's career
student's career
the student's career
in abyss chasm. To recapitulate the facts, it can be said that there must be limitations of
time
in using these technological advancements. So that technology is used in
correct way
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the correct way
a correct way
as it was intended at
time
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the time
of creation and
this
essay
also
agrees with the fact that there must be
balance
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a balance
amongst them.
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