It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schoolchildren #history #world

It is true that

history

should be introduced into the curriculum as a compulsory subject. While I agree that local

history

plays a leading role in the educational program, I

also

believe that

world

history

is a better choice of subject for students. On the one hand, there are several reasons why students should focus on local

history

Firstly

, it is easier for students to learn about the

history

of where they live. Local

history

usually attaches to the activities in students' daily life. Take the North and South Viet Nam as an example. As the southerners have long been inhabiting a fertile region, they are very liberal with their money and often overspend.

In contrast

, the northerners usually have rigorous living standards and strict discipline since their

history

is connected with Confucian.

Secondly

, knowledge of ancestors is essential for students.

For example

, in Ha Noi, students are taught

history

about Dong Da mound where the national hero, Quang Trung, fought against the enemy to protect the country.

This

could pave the way for students to aware of their ancestors' contributions.

On the other hand

, it is wrong to reflect the argument in

favor

promote over another

favour

of the importance of

world

history

educating.

Firstly

, general knowledge about worldwide

history

can equip students for their careers. Students need to gain a deep understanding of historical information about their chosen field to achieve long-term success.

Secondly

world

history

exerts a strong influence on each country's

history

This

leads to learning about

world

history

is an effective way to deeply understand local

history

. In conclusion, it is ludicrous to compare the local

history

and

world

history

as they are equally important.

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