People can perform everyday tasks, such as shopping and banking as well as business transactions, without meeting other people face-to-face because of technology. What are the effects of this on individual and society as a whole.

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Technology is emerging at a rapid rate nowadays. Many moons ago, we were used to
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manual operations for all the bits in banking,
shopping
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and shopping
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. Technology bestowed us
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new realm in which we have so many opportunities to learn, explore and evolve; a
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new modern age era. Today, these services are available
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tip
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of your hand. Today, anyone can do banking, shopping or any other activity which is connected
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internet
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the internet
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and services from anywhere in the world.
People
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do not have to wait in long queues in
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banks
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to withdraw their hard-earned money. They do not have to
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physically
interact with any banking person. They can interact with
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the helpdesk
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at any given time.
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,
people
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like to do the shopping on the go; they prefer an easy way out. With great power comes great responsibility. Technology
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has its own adverse effects on civilization. It makes
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lazy, they want everything
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their fingertips without going anywhere physically. Physical interaction is still considered way better than doing a video/voice chat. It is no surprise that
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we have the tools available today which has made our lifestyle so easy; and all the substantial assets within our scope. But, we
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have the risk of
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losing
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out on
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face-to-face social interaction because
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people
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have been indulged in social media these days. So, we have to carefully analyze and think
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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