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Some people prefer to work with same firm for lifetime while other work with different firms. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals choose to be employed by
one
firm
 for the rest of their lives others
also
 like changing firms.
This
 essay will elaborate more on both choices and my point of view will be known. Working for
one
 organization for a
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
 has
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own merits and
dismerits
a mark against a person for misconduct or failure; usually given in school or armed forces
demerits
.
when
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When
 you
work
 for a long period of time
,
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,
it helps
one
 gain more experience in a particular area and is able to make
firm decision
Suggestion
a firm decision
firm decisions
 relating to the process of the organization. When it comes to policies making
,
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,
he can be considered since he knows more about the
Work
 and the pros and cons of it.
However there
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However, there
 may be some disadvantage regarding staying long in
one
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
, familiarity might set in making your value not worthy and the enthusiasm to
work
 is limited since he may think the
work
 is boring with
same faces
Suggestion
the same faces
 and routines.
For
example some
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example, someone
example someone
one
 who started working for a
firm
 at the age of 20 years continued to stay until he was 45
year
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years
 old has
be
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been
 promoted to assistant CEO for his hard
work
 and dedication.
On the other hand
 moving from
one
 place of
work
 to another is a little stressful, preparing
one
's mind for another
work
 with different orientation programs organized for new staffs always and trying hand to adapt to new skills in other to be abreast with the working environment.
In
addition changing
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addition, changing
 from occupation to varieties makes the employer feels he is not competent enough since his CV will be filled with many previous organizations.A survey
indicate
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indicates
has indicated
 that 20% of job changers might end up not not employ. To
recapitulate
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recapitulate
s, I strongly agree that
one
 should stay in
one
firm
 throughout their life time since its more beneficial

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