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The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today
#maps #show #park #first
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The maps
reveals
Change the verb form
reveal
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Use synonyms
park
Correct article usage
the park
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 in the first years in 1920 and after construction today
Overall
Linking Words
 what stands from
given
Correct article usage
the given
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 information is that a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps shows a change from a largely rural to
mainly
Correct article usage
a mainly
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 urban area . In 1920 Grange
park
Use synonyms
 was
anfashionable
Correct your spelling
unfashionable
an fashionable
fashionable
 but during the
next
Linking Words
years
Add a comma
,years
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 the
park
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 was turned into a beautiful and modern
park
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. The most noticeable fact is that
fountain
Correct article usage
the fountain
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 which is located in the middle of the
park
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oppaside
Correct your spelling
opposite
 the entrance was knocked and replaced
in to
Join the words
into
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 Rose Garden with
a lots
Correct the article-noun agreement
lots
a lot
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 of new tables.
Further
Linking Words
 developments were in the eastern part of the
park
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 the old Glasshouse was replaced
for
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with
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Water features . Looking at the West southern of
Use synonyms
park
Add an article
the park
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 the stage for musicians was constructed into
big
Correct article usage
a big
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 Amphitheater for concerts.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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