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The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today
#maps #show #park #first
The maps
reveals
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reveal
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park
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the park
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 in the first years in 1920 and after construction today
Overall
 what stands from
given
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the given
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 information is that a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps shows a change from a largely rural to
mainly
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a mainly
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 urban area . In 1920 Grange
park
 was
anfashionable
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unfashionable
an fashionable
fashionable
 but during the
next
years
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 the
park
 was turned into a beautiful and modern
park
. The most noticeable fact is that
fountain
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the fountain
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 which is located in the middle of the
park
oppaside
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opposite
 the entrance was knocked and replaced
in to
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into
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 Rose Garden with
a lots
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lots
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 of new tables.
Further
 developments were in the eastern part of the
park
 the old Glasshouse was replaced
for
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with
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Water features . Looking at the West southern of
park
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the park
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 the stage for musicians was constructed into
big
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a big
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 Amphitheater for concerts.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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