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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People’s
quality
 of
life
 has improved tremendously over the centuries. The important factors for
this
 change are due to upmarket infrastructure, advanced medical facilities and various initiatives taken by the government to bring up people’s living standard.
However
, some people believe, the pollution in the atmosphere and
quality
 of food is slowly getting deteriorated which are
threat
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a threat
 to the humanity. In my opinion, I strongly agree
to
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with
this
 thought, that the
quality
 of
life
 has grown when compared to centuries ago, which will be discussed in the following passage. The Improved infrastructure helps to people to lead
quality
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a quality life
life
, and better transport connectivity
reduce
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reduces
 the transit duration;
such
 facilities were not enjoyed by our ancestors.
For instance
, my
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
 were travelling for 16 hours to reach the city, due to the improved transportation system the travelling time is being reduced in leaps and bounds.
In addition
, the
quality
 of food is being constantly monitored by the government to cater
quality
 eatable to every citizen, but some people argue that the food consumed by our ancestors
were
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was
 more nutritious that now.
Thus
, it is believed the
quality
 of
life
 has been grown in
21st century
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the 21st century
 which is
good sign
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a good sign
.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the advancement in medical facilities aided people to live longer, various
life
 threatening diseases are easily identified and cured. On the other side, people who lived centuries ago died due ignorance and improper medications.
Therefore
, current generation people are
benefitted
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benefiting
 because of upmarket medical facilities when compared to our ancestors. To sum up, as the technology
grows it
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grows, it
 directly improves the
quality
 of
life
 which I believe there won’t be any
second
 thought,
also
this
 has cascading effect to all living beings in the universe.

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