Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Cultural Tradition is very important to save day by day we see people are leaving their
culture
and adopting western
culture
into their life that becomes a threat to our tradition.
However many
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However, many
people are adopting our
culture
just to make some money out of it, if we talk about
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
there are many ancient
culture
Suggestion
cultures
and monuments which are surviving just of tourist attraction,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
also having
Suggestion
also has
is also having
no
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
of keeping our monuments and other things clean and in a healthy state. Tourist are the only hope for the our
culture
because if tourist stop visit our monuments and our ancient cultural places they will get destroyed, there are many Fort in India people having no idea about it,
government
Suggestion
the government
is
also
not bother about it, if tourist doesn't show up government ban all our cultural
site
Suggestion
sites
and start developing Something else there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Dilution of cultural traditions
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Revenue
  • Financial support
  • Preservation
  • Promotion
  • Commodification of culture
  • Intrinsic value
  • Exposure
  • Global awareness
  • Respect and understanding
  • Economic gain
  • Local communities
  • Decision-making processes
  • Respectful portrayal
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