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overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

#overpopulation #areas #two #ones #governments #individuals
We can’t deny that people from
villages
Suggestion
the villages
 have
tendency
Suggestion
tendered
 to immigrate to municipal areas because of looking for jobs or
better life
Suggestion
a better life
.
This
 has led to
population explosion
Suggestion
population explosions
a population explosion
 of urban areas
that is
 one of the biggest issues today. In my opinion,
overpopulation
 has an effect on natural resources, environment...
therefore
Suggestion
Therefore
, I think we should find out about
overpopulation
 and have some effective solutions to settle
this
 problem. Human
overpopulation
 is one of the main causes of the depletion of natural resources.
Overpopulation
 results in increasing demands for using resources, especially non-renewable resources
such
 as crude oil, fossil fuels, coal, natural gas... So that, natural resources are declining. Not only that,
growing number
Suggestion
a growing number
growing numbers
 of people
also causes
Suggestion
also cause
have also caused
are also causing
 environmental damage
such
 as pollution, deforestation, sewage… There are more industry zones, emission from the burning fossil fuels brings about air pollution. People cut down forests to occupy land to construct accommodations or cultivate. It is important for governments
to have
Suggestion
have
population
 control methods. They can raise public awareness about
planning family
Accept comma addition
planning, family
 to control the rate of
population
.
Besides
, better education
also
 plays a vital role in human knowledge.
For example
, families that are facing a hard life and they decide to have three or four children.
This
 will make family life more difficult and may not be eligible to grow these children.
providing
Suggestion
Providing
 sex education in schools should be
must
slightly wet
moist
. Parents and teachers should educate students to understand correctly about sex education, and help them to avoid looking for wrong information on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 or discussing it with their friends. Individuals must take responsibility to follow
rules
Suggestion
the rules
 and educate themselves. Everyone should know clearly about
effects
Suggestion
the effects
 of
overpopulation
 and cooperate with governments to solve these problems. In conclusion, we are facing
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 many serious problems due to
population
 explosion and governments and individuals should join hands to settle these issues effectively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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