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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal ? How important it is for a child to learn a foreign language ?

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All students should learn foreign
language
 as soon as they get admission in
school
,
However
 it seems that it an impractical aspiration, no matter how much we might admire
this
 idea. The main obstacle comes from the
school
 teachers, if the students are not yet mentally prepared
,
Accept space
,
this
 will significantly
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 them while learning a new
language
.
although
Suggestion
Although
 it is good to learn a
language
 but for the students it will be overwhelmingly extra burden on them, these painful lessons shown by the states
such
 as middle east countries, seem to demonstrate learning a foreign
language
 is intolerably difficult for them.
a
Suggestion
A
further
 issue relates to "age factor" of
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 who are younger seems to be much more focused on their parents, as their interest
lie
put into a certain place or abstract location
lay
 elsewhere.
other
Suggestion
Another
Other
 significant factor is that students show
there
of them or themselves
their
interests
Suggestion
interest
 in playing games, rather than in studies.
one
Suggestion
One
 final point against
this
 is, students should be nourished, pampered by parents and as well as teachers to overcome the fear till they start to go to the
school
 and
this
 will surely help them. While it may be correct that foreign languages gives an extra advantage to students, as they opt out for foreign countries for higher studies, work or settling there but it still appears to be the case that it is not necessary as it will impact child development.
this
Suggestion
This
 needs to be adopted for other means
such
 as, after finishing their high
school
 administration should make compulsory for every student to acquire knowledge of foreign terminology. To summarise, it seems that foreign languages do provide a skill to a person,
however
, due to child capability & his willingness to learn will play a major role in
this
.

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