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People nowadays are not as fit and active as they were in the past. What are the reasons for this? What measures can be taken for this?

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Since the turn of the 21st century, the issue of the people does not feel in good healthy and active as they used to do have become a highly noticeable condition, triggering healthy problems and declining quality of lives.
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, potential problems of
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problem
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 issue is the changed of life styles. As well as the technological advancement, loads of people have been using the technical aids, technical devices and machines.
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, when they go outside to a near place, they take a car.
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, it led to them sedentary lifestyle due to sitting and working the whole day on the table without movements.
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, some students are taking the online classes
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 of face to face. What is the suitable solution for these problems is that physical exercises are needed to do well,
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 as, walking, running and go to the gym.
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, a lot of consumption of fast food is
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 concern,
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, burger, pizza, etc. If the consumption habits go on with
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 trend, people will get a serious health
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. To avoid
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 situation becoming any worse, they should turn to eat healthy food like home-made, vegetables & fruits. Without
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 is unlikely to be solved. Taking everything into consideration, in my humble opinion, if the proposed alternative solutions were to be implemented, these potential problems could be reduced to some extent, even if not totally eliminated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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