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Is Learning English More Important Than Learning Local Languages

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Most educational institutions world-wide gives English
language
 prime importance as compared to other local languages because they feel that students are at a risk of achieving something significant in their lives. In my opinion,
such
 a presumption is true, and I can cite numerous instances to support the same. We live
in
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on
 a globe with individuals who belong to over 196 countries, having disparate languages to communicate
in
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with
. If we do not have a common
language
 recognized globally it would be very tedious for humans to operate in their day to day environment.
For instance
, an audit firm based out of Japan, has got a clientele based out of Spain. Now if these two firms need to converse, they will have to learn the
language
 of their counterparts.
This
 process of understanding varied
language
be
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is
 time-consuming, as
result delays
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a result delays
 in projects are bound to happen.
Hence in
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Hence, in
 order to be
efficient most
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efficient, most
 organisations globally adopted English as a
language
 to talk
in
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with
to
.
Additionally
, one would often come across people who love to travel and want to know about the rich culture and history of neighbouring countries,
this
 would only be possible if we have one
language
that is
 routine for everyone.
In
contrast some
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contrast, some
 people hold the view that their native
language
 is integral and should be given the highest priority in education. They feel that speaking in their mother tongue gives a sense of belongingness and reminds them of their roots.
Also
, the backward classes in most of the places have no access to a multilingual education set up.
Hence
, in order to maintain equality and
sanity
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sane
 in their
nations they
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nations, they
 prefer to talk in local
language
. These
language
 barriers can be avoided if governments everywhere make education free of cost and employ teachers who are proficient in more than one
language
, essentially in English.
This
 will keep the world at large close and would end up in a
huge
squeeze (someone) tightly in your arms, usually with fondness
hug
 of seven continents.
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