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Some people think that children should not watch television as it has negative effects while some people believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people opine that watching TV will cause bad impacts for the juveniles, whereas others think that it will be useful for their career. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view. On the one hand, children watching television programs will affect their behaviour.
That is
 to say that they are showing more crime and violent scenes which will indulge them to do the same in their real life.
Moreover
, it will make them to get addicted to those habits.
For example
, most of the TV programs in India has violence and revenge for the enemies and when youth watches
such
 kind of scenes they will tend to do the same in real. In my opinion, I believe they should not watch TV as it will be the negative influence for the minors to commit crimes.
On the other hand
, by seeing the television programs
such
 as National Geography and NEWS will enhance the knowledge of the offspring.
In other words
, they will get the opportunity to learn and see the animals and its behaviour.
Also
, the activities happening in the world by watching the news channels.
This
 will help them to develop their passion and proceed with their career.
For instance
, a minor can know about the habits of the wild animals and its significant part in biodiversity.
However
, I do not support
this
 notion, as most of the youngsters are following their parents by seeing unnecessary programs which will not help them in their future. In conclusion,
although
 some people think that children ought to watch television as it helps them to learn new things and implement in their career, I reiterate it has more drawbacks which will affect their attitudes by watching irrelevant programs for their growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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